Stine Writing and Miniatures

Without you: Spanish Ovillejo

When do the feelings seem sublime?
All the time!
Where does the heart go to cure?
So obscure!
How will I go on without you?
Sad but true!

All the time I feel obscure
Missing the days you were here
Knowing you’re gone without fear
Needing rain to pour down a cure.

©2023 CBialczak

So today being the 10th day our poetry is to be crafted in the style of the Spanish Ovillejo which comprises 10 lines broken into two sub stanzas thus:

  • first stanza is composed of six lines
  • three rhyming couplets
  • the rhyme scheme is aabbcc
  • 8/3 syllables per couplet
  • each couplet is a question/answer or echo
  • –
  • second stanza is composed of four lines
  • rhyme scheme cddc
  • 6-8 syllables for the three lines* (I’ve seen a range of syllables used).
  • the final line combines lines 2, 4, and 6 together.
MTB: Spanish rain in the Ovillejo

12 comments

  4. If you want to rewrite line 7 and the final line go ahead (I did admire the cure/obscure pairing even though it strays a little from the set rhyme structure cddc) otherwise the poem is well composed within the guidelines and has some evocative questioning

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